Ode to the doughnut
Your simple circular shape becomes desirable
Your beginning reveals not the pleasure you bestow
The lowly start of measured flour combined with sweet sugar
Your baker adds the blessing of salt and starts the process of sifting
Out goes your lumps one by one light and airy you now become.
Butter imparts lush essence to enhance the flavors you impart.
Milk and yeast combined for life bubbling and gurgling stretching.
Your wonder provider yeast brings you up from flat existence.
Mixing and needing combining for whole
Rest for a while rising to be reduced
Your last opportunity to play as the dough
The machine beckons to be filled with your bounty
Extruded out a perfect circle one by one
Floating on the river of oil to sizzle and bubble on you expedition
Golden brown your bottom becomes
Over your pushed to brown some more
Finishing your trip now left to drip
One final mix of sugar and milk for your coat
Final coat to grace you now
Your desirable presence for all to enjoy
I removed “Milks tempered desired temperature 110 degrees Fahrenheit.” because it did not help the flow of the ode and did not add to the understanding even though the temperature is important for the yeast.
I changed “Butter in liquefied state imparts lush essence of enhancement for flavor you impart.” to help with the flow and improve readability. It just seemed to long and I felt rushed to finish the line. There were a few lines that I changed a word to enhance how the line sounded.
I added “One final mix of sugar and milk for your coat” because I told the reader about the final coat being applied but did not tell the making of the coat.
I rearranged these two lines.
Milk and yeast combined for life bubbling and gurgling stretching.
Your wonder provider yeast brings you up from flat existence.
Milk and yeast are combined before adding to the mixture.
The changes I have made affected the readability and flow of the discourse in a positive manner. The changes also affected the chronological order and put the sequences of how to make a doughnut in the proper order. The main difference from the changes would be the clarity of what I conveyed in changing the chronological flow and the readability of the ode. My desire in writing is to improve upon what is already there and seems to be a continuous process.
Tuesday, February 16, 2010
Tuesday, February 9, 2010
Can I Play?
http://www.time.com/time/today-in-pictures/0,31511,1958926,00.html
I imagine taking this photo of the White House in Washington DC in awe of the beauty of the snow as it lies on the fenced in lawn. Thinking back to the time I lived in Nebraska and the winter snow fall I would play in. I would take the time to make a snowman and dress it up with charcoal eyes and a carrot for its nose. I kept a top hat in storage just for the occasion and would place it on top of the snowman’s head. It was a wonderful experience.
Looking at the White House lawn I think how fun it would be to be inside the fence playing in the snow. Rolling out the three sections I need to build my snowman. I know there are people that would want four sections but I think the stability of three is best and it would also be a challenge to lift the fourth section onto the top to make the head. As I am building the snowman I stop to watch the children and their parents play. Some children are lying on the snow sweeping their arms and legs back and forth making snow angles while other children are having a snowball fight. The children would be running around chasing each other and hiding behind the snow covered trees to escape the inbound snowballs. All the people there are laughing and enjoying the time spent together. Just watching the activity around me brings a smile.
I return to completing the task at hand of rolling out the sections of my snowman and then start the process of assembling. I recruit some parents and children to lift the middle section onto the base. They help pack in snow between the sections to ensure the top does not roll off. I then place the head on the top and it completes the snowman perfectly. I did not have charcoal or a carrot to make the face but made indentations for the facial features. I stand back and admire the work and notice the United States flag flying over the White House and I know this is a special place and I am honored to be here.
After everyone is tired and needing to rest The President and his family come out to see the snowmen and angles that were made and comments on how wonderful it is to see the children play. The first family offer hot chocolate with marshmallows and hot apple cider to everyone. It is a welcome pleasure to warm our bodies and lift our spirits even more. The President’s children encourage the other children to go back and play, so the adults stay back and watch and remember back to a time when they were young.
I imagine taking this photo of the White House in Washington DC in awe of the beauty of the snow as it lies on the fenced in lawn. Thinking back to the time I lived in Nebraska and the winter snow fall I would play in. I would take the time to make a snowman and dress it up with charcoal eyes and a carrot for its nose. I kept a top hat in storage just for the occasion and would place it on top of the snowman’s head. It was a wonderful experience.
Looking at the White House lawn I think how fun it would be to be inside the fence playing in the snow. Rolling out the three sections I need to build my snowman. I know there are people that would want four sections but I think the stability of three is best and it would also be a challenge to lift the fourth section onto the top to make the head. As I am building the snowman I stop to watch the children and their parents play. Some children are lying on the snow sweeping their arms and legs back and forth making snow angles while other children are having a snowball fight. The children would be running around chasing each other and hiding behind the snow covered trees to escape the inbound snowballs. All the people there are laughing and enjoying the time spent together. Just watching the activity around me brings a smile.
I return to completing the task at hand of rolling out the sections of my snowman and then start the process of assembling. I recruit some parents and children to lift the middle section onto the base. They help pack in snow between the sections to ensure the top does not roll off. I then place the head on the top and it completes the snowman perfectly. I did not have charcoal or a carrot to make the face but made indentations for the facial features. I stand back and admire the work and notice the United States flag flying over the White House and I know this is a special place and I am honored to be here.
After everyone is tired and needing to rest The President and his family come out to see the snowmen and angles that were made and comments on how wonderful it is to see the children play. The first family offer hot chocolate with marshmallows and hot apple cider to everyone. It is a welcome pleasure to warm our bodies and lift our spirits even more. The President’s children encourage the other children to go back and play, so the adults stay back and watch and remember back to a time when they were young.
Tuesday, February 2, 2010
The Collection
Yesterday I mailed three payments for magazine subscriptions. One was a renewal for biking magazine and the other two were unsolicited financial and cooking magazines. Why subscribe to magazines when I do not have the time to read them and fully appreciate the information that is offered? Some days my resolve to just say no is not strong.
I have ten subscriptions currently and with the new additions brings me to twelve magazines. They very the gamut from Consumer information, Health and fitness geared towards men, biking, mountain biking, computer, cooking and now a financial magazine. I know I need to have a mechanical and electronic magazine also but someone has not figured out that I really need them yet. I do find them interesting to read through, but more of a skim looking for the tidbit of information that I feel would benefit me. I mark the page of a recipe that looks enticing or article that I wish to come back to when I have more available time. After looking through the magazine I place it in the magazine basket on top of the 30 to 40 other magazines place there.
I have a hard time tossing magazines into the recycling bin due to one or two interesting articles and not wanting to loose the information and at the time seemed important. Eventually I go through the basket and start the purge. It is not an easy process needing to look through each magazine before placing it in the discard pile or keep pile. After looking at about six to eight magazines I start to fade from the task and the demarcation of which magazine to toss comes to what the cover lists as the key information contained in its articles. At times I have removed pages to keep and dispose the rest of the magazine but that creates other problems with where to put the pages and when do I look at them again. After 30 minutes of sorting I stop the process and after a short debate with myself on weather I should keep any in the toss pile I place the magazines in the recycling container.
Why do I need more magazines? It is not that I need more it is because the solicitations I receive in the mail make it difficult to not to subscribe. The financial magazine’s pitch was 80 percent off the news stand price which brought the cost to eight dollars a year and in addition I could subscribe for two years at the same rate, which I did. I can always use financial advice. The cooking magazine had the same pitch but at the rate of twelve dollars a year and I wanted Rachel’s newest quick meal recipe. I do not always give into the solicitation but I was having a moment of weakness.
I have ten subscriptions currently and with the new additions brings me to twelve magazines. They very the gamut from Consumer information, Health and fitness geared towards men, biking, mountain biking, computer, cooking and now a financial magazine. I know I need to have a mechanical and electronic magazine also but someone has not figured out that I really need them yet. I do find them interesting to read through, but more of a skim looking for the tidbit of information that I feel would benefit me. I mark the page of a recipe that looks enticing or article that I wish to come back to when I have more available time. After looking through the magazine I place it in the magazine basket on top of the 30 to 40 other magazines place there.
I have a hard time tossing magazines into the recycling bin due to one or two interesting articles and not wanting to loose the information and at the time seemed important. Eventually I go through the basket and start the purge. It is not an easy process needing to look through each magazine before placing it in the discard pile or keep pile. After looking at about six to eight magazines I start to fade from the task and the demarcation of which magazine to toss comes to what the cover lists as the key information contained in its articles. At times I have removed pages to keep and dispose the rest of the magazine but that creates other problems with where to put the pages and when do I look at them again. After 30 minutes of sorting I stop the process and after a short debate with myself on weather I should keep any in the toss pile I place the magazines in the recycling container.
Why do I need more magazines? It is not that I need more it is because the solicitations I receive in the mail make it difficult to not to subscribe. The financial magazine’s pitch was 80 percent off the news stand price which brought the cost to eight dollars a year and in addition I could subscribe for two years at the same rate, which I did. I can always use financial advice. The cooking magazine had the same pitch but at the rate of twelve dollars a year and I wanted Rachel’s newest quick meal recipe. I do not always give into the solicitation but I was having a moment of weakness.
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